@dyana I’m not a native reader nor an expert, so take my comments with a grain of salt. Also, this seems to be aiming for a specific tight-not-touching display aesthetic, and I’m not qualified to weigh in on this from a non-Latin perspective.
That said, the tightness of the vowel mātrās in ना (nā) and री (rī) leave the wide stance of ग (ga) feeling very unnatural there and pulling the word apart rather than cohering.
Spacing aside, the arm of न looks a bit long (or व slightly too narrow?). And the knot on the ग seems heavier than that on न, and I don’t know that it should be.
But that’s a lot of second-guessing on my part.
Perhaps someone like
@matratype would be better qualified to comment, if you’re seeking more feedback.